Entrance Essay critique

[ireilly13]

Hey guys, any critiques would be helpful, thanks in advance.

In my early years I grew up fast; by the age of 14 I was as a professional skateboarder by 24 was a sponsored and competing snowboarder and at 30 was competitively racing motocross. Whether it was skateboarding, snowboarding or motocross, I have spent a great deal of time on the patient end of receiving medical care and treatment. I have had numerous hospital visits; facial reconstructive surgery, broken back, fractured skull, torn ligaments, a four day ICU visit, multiple outpatient visits and a total of 27 broken bones. I know what patients are feeling, the questions they have and how to help answer these questions and ease their worries. I want to be able to help people whether they are in the Emergency room or in the ICU.

My life has been immersed in activities where fast critical thinking is the norm, an attribute essential in nursing. I believe my ability to work under pressure and be clearly productive under pressure has strengthened and prepared me for this profession. I have an affinity for the physiology of the human body and I am incredibly empathic to what others are experiencing. Returning to college has proven to be a productive choice on my part. I am moving through my prerequisites with competence and a desire to learn more. I will continue studying the human body and further my understanding of illness diagnosis and treatment along with critical care and find the best ways of educating patients while helping them understand complex issues in a simple way.

Being able to help those in need, in pain, confused and worried is something to take pride in. Nurses have always astounded me. The compassion and unconditional care from nurses is a true measure of pride. I want that! I want to help those who are not able to help themselves. Health care is a constantly changing and developing practice worldwide and personal growth is essential to keep pace with demands.

I've chosen to become a nurse because I want to make a difference at critical times in people's lives. Nursing is the ability to improve lives every day and make a profound difference. People will remember the assistance, care and compassion I've given them during their critical time spent in a hospital. After my BSN I am striving to work in ICU, trauma and emergency care and plan on a Master's Degree in nursing. I am looking to begin that career path with acceptance into your program.

thanks for any help.