Admissions Essay - William Jewell Accelerated BSN

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This is my first post on the site, just joined a few days ago. I have been reading articles/threads for about a month now and love the content! To start, I am a recent graduate of Iowa State University w/ degree in Kinesiology&Health and minor in Psych. I am applying to a few schools, with only WJC requiring an admissions essay. Anyways, the specific prompt asks for 250-500 word essay answering two questions, 1) Why do you want to be a nurse? and 2) Why is WJC the place to do it?

I pasted my rough draft below for (hopefully) some of you to review with experience in english for grammar/wording tips or any nurses/current students for any general critiquing. All help is greatly appreciated! Thanks a lot in advance.

It would be simple to say I want to be a nurse because I am fascinated by the human body, I love to help people, and I thrive in challenging, fast-paced environments. My sincere hope is that everyone with aspirations of becoming a nurse would possess these abilities. As with most careers, there is so much more to it. What many have stated before is true; it does take a special kind of person to not only be willing, but to thrive as a nurse. I feel strongly that I am this person. What makes me so sure? What drives my desire to become a great nurse and why is satiating that desire so important to me?

I have been quite fortunate with invaluable, ongoing experiences as a young adult which continue to bless me with the opportunity to form relationships with some of the greatest people once could meet. These people have so much more to offer than what appears on the surface. Having had the chance to develop lasting relationships with several recovering or former addicts, often speaking with them of the importance of second (sometimes third) chances, family, and growth as people. Having had the chance to work individually on a daily basis with an autistic young man, each day my eyes opened a little more as to just how unfortunately misunderstood the autistic population is. Coaching multiple Special Olympics teams, consisting of young people with the brightest smiles you will ever see and athletic abilities most cognitively-unimpaired people only dream of. Now, as a medical scribe, being able to test my vast clinical knowledge, prior education, and critical thinking skills on a daily basis while seemingly learning something new every minute. It wasn't until shortly after beginning my current position that it all came full circle: the patients are at the center of it all. Healthcare providers possessing the ability to consistently keep patients' interests in mind, advocating for them and their families no matter the circumstances are whom aspiring professionals like myself strive to become. It is the aforementioned people I was so fortunate to connect with over the years, my experiences, and abilities to empathize with those in physical, emotional, even spiritual suffering which instill the confidence in me that I will become such a provider.

William Jewell College will ideally serve as my incubator, if you will. Professors of William Jewell hold a reputation of approachability, while serving as mentors, not just educators. Students of William Jewell are challenged each day to approach problems with critical minds, which is absolutely crucial in a fast-paced environment such as nursing. These same students leave with an improved ability to explore, understand what makes people who they are. For these reasons, I feel strongly that William Jewell would prepare me for a successful career as a nurse while providing me with a multitude of other skills and experiences lasting a lifetime.

My sincere hope is that you will consider me as a candidate for your Accelerated BSN Program, to continue this revered institution's reputation.