Can anyone help me, please? BSN Admissions essay!

[china.graves]

Usually i can write great papers with ease, and now that I have to write this essay that is more than likely going to determine my fate, I HAVE WRITER'S BLOCK! lol

The topic is: "Explain your interest in pursuing a degree in nursing, past related experiences, and why you believe you are a good candidate for this profession."

1. I am an intelligent, assertive, compassionate, driven, and ambitious young woman who will thrive in the nursing program at ___ University, and succeed in the profession of nursing.

2. My mom and I were victims of a violent home invasion, where she was badly injured. This made a profound impact on me, and so did the ER nurses who took care of us. They were so compassionate, and this is what led me to pursuing a career in healthcare as a nurse.

3. I want to join the Navy after I graduate to give those countries who are less fortunate better medical care, because God knows they need it. I want to be an NP as well.

Help me! Maybe I am being a bit too hard on myself, but I cannot even start the darn thing with erasing it, lol.

[Alliedhealth]

For starters just elaborate or embellish on the things you already know; then, just put in meaningful fluff or filler. I would suggest starting with "My mom and I were victims of a violent home invasion, where she was badly injured. This made a profound impact on me, and so did the ER nurses who took care of us. They were so compassionate..." and fill in other reasons. One continuation could be that they compassion really helped you to stay calm through the crisis which helped you to be strong for your mom.... I pretty sure you get where that's going. Explain in detail what they did that impacted your life in such a major way. Explain what you want to carry from that experience into your own nursing career and why. Explain what you think would make you a good nurse; not just from an academic stand point. Why you want to pursue nursing on an undergrad level and a grad level. And last but not least, explain what you plan to do in the Navy with your degree. I'm pretty sure once you have all this information in your essay, you can then edit it to your taste. I hope this helps.

[Cherry02]

I think it would be a good idea to start with the story of the home invasion...I would confine it to a paragraph, if possible, since that isn't directly what the essay is about...but it is a good way to draw a reader in and make them want to keep reading. Then briefly tie that story into some of the other things you will expand on later in your essay....and that, in my opinion, would be a good start. After you get your first paragraph down, it will probably get easier. Good luck!