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haha, yes I definitely will have to ask, I am just glad to possibly have to opportunity to do something other than a medical floor. Thanks for your assumptions :)

Hi I got an interview for a periop tech at a hospital... What is that? Where would I be working? I'm a cna

Lucky0220 thank you for proofreading and catching my errors! I appreciate the positive feedback and the constructive critiscm

i like assertive! thats better! and Green217, thanks for the feedback, ill have to ponder the light bulb moment... and to be honest, I would love to go through medical school, but i need something to pay my way through it

Haha yes thanks! I really wasn't trying to sound creepy!

I wanted to stray from saying I enjoy helping and caring for others.... I can only imagine how cliched that sounds to admissions

MOM milk of magnesia learn it love it in a ltc setting BM pretty basic, you'll say it several time over the course of a day

I was unsure whether my use of headstrong was appropriate or not... I'll dig out the thesauraus!

Thanks canesdukegirl for your great feedback! I really appreciate your willingness to help! Thank you everyone else for the feedback, I'll try rewording the body statement... I hope you all understand what I was actually getting at...

Thank you lucky0220 and mazy!! Really appreciate the feedback

i dont have the ability to private message people? i guess...so here is my essay, you can pm me the edited? Describe a significant challenge that you have faced and how you addressed this challenge, the reasons why you have chosen nursing, what strengths you bring to the profession, and why you want this program. The challenge I have faced and the reason why I have chosen nursing coincide. I attempted nursing school in the past at a different school, however, the high cost of private school made completing my wish very difficult. Growing up, I was a very shy child, it wasn’t until my first year of nursing school that I broke this shyness and began to develop more confidence in myself. During my first clinical rotation at an assisted living facility, my instructor made us all dive in, quite a sink or swim approach. This intimidated me greatly, I was unsure if I was going to make it through the semester! I discussed my anxieties with my instructor and she came into the patient’s room with me to start. I introduced myself to the patient and she gave me the biggest smile and said that I reminded her of her daughter. That immediate connection gave me great confidence. As I sat and talked with my patient, I looked up to see that my instructor had left and I had preformed my physical assessment and history assessment all by myself without an ounce of anxiety. I will never forget that first patient experience and the confidence she gave me. While not all my patients in my 4 previous clinical settings were as supportive as her, I have developed great interpersonal skills and have dramatically overcome my shyness. My original reason for choosing nursing was because ever since I can remember, I always had curiosities about the human body. As I grew up, my curiosities for the body turned into curiosities on diseases. My reason for choosing nursing was solidified because in high school I was a caregiver to my grandmother who developed Pick’s Disease and suffered a strong battle with dementia. Being able to assist her with everyday things was extraordinarily difficult, but looking back on it, it was a highly rewarding task. Strengths I feel I can bring to this profession are the skills I am currently learning as a CNA on a busy hospital floor, a strong affinity for people, a great interest in the human body, sciences and learning and finally a headstrong personality. I want this program because I want another shot to further the career that I already immerse myself in several days a week. I want another shot at the career that changed my life from day one.

It's 3 paragraphs long, 400 words... Just need someone to look it over for me :)