I like your response, and agree with the other comment about looking it over for grammatical errors etc. You did not indicate if this was a formal paper or not, so mostly I would think your faculty is trying to get a feel for which nurses are there for the sake of the patients, the sake of a paycheck, or as our faculty pointed out, with the intent of marrying a Dr. My personal story was similar, I felt everything I had been through in my life led me to the nursing path at age 47, and have had no regrets. Good luck!