I think that you have some really good ideas and sentences in your personal statement, but I think it could also use some work. Your second sentence is borderline a run-on sentence due to your excessive use of "and." I think that you could also elaborate on how you hugging and interacting with people at church is related to your passion to care for others. I understand the idea, but I think that it is a little disconnected in conjunction with the third sentence. It is also a good idea to refrain from beginning a sentence with "but." You may want to begin it with "however" instead. In this sentence, "...about the opportunity to earn by CNA license..." you used "by" instead of "my." Overall, I think you did a good job, but you may want to make a few adjustments to make this essay really good. Just mind your syntax, grammar, choice of vocabulary, and minimize the length of some of your sentences. Good luck!