Personal Statement essay

[Tiana1]

Hi everyone,

I don't know if this is the right place to post this, but any help would be greatly appreciated.  I am applying for a direct entry program to become a FNP.  I have been working on my personal statement for several weeks.  Would people please critique this for me?  The university I am applying to specifically said that the personal statement can make or break your application even with outstanding other credentials.  Thank you all in advance for your input.  Simmons personal statement. .pdf.docx