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thank you all for your input it has been very helpful. there is not necessarily a rubric the only stipulations are to make the essay 1 pg, why i want to be a nurse, why i would be a good for for the school and give a little info about myself. i am not currently a student and my previous nursing program gave us training at a hospital that only excepts rn's with there bachelors currently. it has been a motivation for most of us to go back to school. Dear Nursing Admissions Committee, I am currently a Licensed Practical Nurse. I received my nursing license March 17th 2015. I have been working at the Berkshire Center Nursing Home for seven months. I have six years' experience working as a certified nursing assistant. I would consider myself to be a very determined individual. Once I set a goal, I accomplish it no matter the task. As a mother I strive to demonstrate to my children that all is possible as long as you are motivated and willing to work hard toward your goals. Ever since a young age I knew I was destined to care for others. As a child I was always inclined to help my friends and family. My mother has suffered from Hansen's disease for a very long time and throughout my life I have cared for her. At times being a caregiver has taken a toll on my scholastic ability. While in college my mother's leprosy caused other complications with her health. I had to withdraw from school a few times. Unfortunately once or twice I was too late to do so and my grades resulted in failure. I have never let this hold me back. When I enrolled in the LPN course it became my chance for redemption. I had longed to become a nurse and further my education. While in nursing school I had numerous memorable clinical experiences. Being able to get an insight on the different areas in the nursing field opened my eyes to the possibilities in a nursing career. I had clinical rotations on the pediatric unit, mental health unit, maternity, geriatrics and in the emergency department. While on the pediatric unit I cared for a 7 year old child who had been rushed in for an emergency appendectomy. The patient was around the age of my oldest daughter at the time. The child was so little yet so brave. It was rewarding being able to care for him watching the recovery and being a part of that process. Not only was I performing assessments and administering medication, I was interacting with him, playing with him , making him smile and making him more comfortable in the hospital setting. It was so rewarding to see him go home all better”, he hugged me that day and thanked me for being his friend. My clinical experiences at Reading Hospital motivated me to advance my nursing career and pursue a further degree in Registered Nursing. The Reading Hospital School of Health Sciences has a competitive curriculum and it would be an honor to be accepted into the nursing program. Being a caring, hardworking, enthusiastic and versatile individual makes me a great candidate for this program. I am determined and focused on becoming a registered nurse. I currently work the flex position at my job and have a very supportive family that are willing to help me in my endeavors. I have previous medical experience and truly am dedicated to becoming the best nurse possible. My life experiences have helped me to realize that nursing is my calling, that when given the opportunity to help and care for others I feel best about myself and I thrive. Thank you all for your time and I'm looking forward to hearing back from you.

every time i post it for some reason it takes out my spacing. do u think i should double space my final copy.

also im already out of school right now so im not sure who can help me revise my paper.

Dear nursing admissions committee, My name is Fallon Franqui I am a 24 year old mother of three. I am currently a licensed practical nurse for roughly eight months. I was previously a certified nurse's aid for six years. I would consider myself to be a very determined individual. Once I set a goal I accomplish it no matter the task. As a mother I strive to demonstrate to my children that all is possible as long as you are motivated and willing to work hard toward your goals. Ever since a young age I knew I was destined to care for others. As a child I was always inclined to help my friends and family. My mother has suffered from Hansen's disease for a very long time and throughout my life I have cared for her. At times being a caregiver has taken a toll on my scholastic ability. While in college my mother's leprosy caused other complications with her health, I had to withdraw from school a few times and unfortunately once or twice I was too late to do so and my grades resulted in failure. I have never let this hold me back. When I enrolled in the LPN course it became my chance for redemption. I had longed to become a nurse and further my education. While in nursing school I had numerous memorable clinical experiences. Being able to get a taste of different areas in the nursing field opened my eyes to the possibilities in a nursing career. I personally enjoyed being on the pediatric unit, on the mental health unit and in the emergency setting. While on the pediatric unit I cared for a 7 year old boy who had been rushed in for an emergency appendectomy. He was around the age of my oldest daughter at the time. He was so little yet so brave. It was rewarding being able to care for him watching him recover and being a part of that process. Not only was I assessing his incision and administering his medication, I was interacting with him, playing with him , making him smile and making him more comfortable in the hospital setting. It was so rewarding to see him go home all better”, he hugged me that day and thanked me for being his friend. Our clinicals where mostly held in the reading hospital, it was a letdown for me once I realized that in order to work in the hospital a nurse must be registered. This is when my next goal began to formulate in my career checklist. I decided I needed to become a registered nurse. The reading hospital school of health sciences has a competitive curriculum and it would be an honor to be accepted into the nursing program. I believe I am a perfect fit despite some minor bumps in the road, I am determined and focused on becoming a registered nurse. I currently work the flex position at my job and have a very supportive family that are willing to help me in my endeavors. I have previous medical experience and truly am dedicated to becoming the best nurse possible. My life experiences have helped me to realize that nursing is my calling, that when given the opportunity to help and care for others I feel best about myself and I thrive. Thank you all for your time and I'm looking forward to hearing back from you. here is more of a paragraph breakdown.thank you for your input. if i don't start with my name how can i change the beginning to still fit my introduction.

thank you so much your advice was quite helpful. CryssyD

ok... English is my first language. would you care to elaborate on my errors, you seem to be an experienced writer i'm assuming.

any other words of advice or????? what if i separate it at ever since.

im not sure how to post but i'm tring to get some feedback about my essay, its supposed to be one page...help Dear nursing admissions committee, My name is Fallon Franqui I am a 24yo mother of three. I am currently a licensed practical nurse for roughly eight months. I was previously a certified nurse's aid for six years. I would consider myself to be a very determined individual. Once I set a goal I accomplish it no matter the task. As a mother I strive to demonstrate to my children that all is possible as long as you are motivated and willing to work hard toward your goals. Ever since a young age I knew I was destined to care for others. As a child I was always inclined to help my friends and family. My mother has suffered from leprosy for a very long time and throughout my life I have cared for her. At times being a caregiver has taken a toll on my scholastic ability. While in college my mother's leprosy caused other complications with her health, I had to withdraw from school a few times and unfortunately once or twice I was too late to do so and my grades resulted in failure. I have never let this hold me back. When I enrolled in the LPN course it became my chance for redemption. I had longed to become a nurse and further my education. While in nursing school I had numerous memorable clinical experiences. Being able to get a taste of different areas in the nursing field opened my eyes to the possibilities in a nursing career. I personally enjoyed being in the pediatric unit, on the mental health unit and in the emergency setting. While on the pediatric unit I cared for a 7 year old boy who had been rushed in for an emergency appendectomy. He was around the age of my oldest daughter at the time. He was so little yet so brave. It was rewarding being able to care for him watching him recover and being a part of that process. Not only was I assessing his incision and administering his medication, I was interacting with him, playing with him , making him smile and making him more comfortable in the hospital setting. It was so rewarding to see him go home all better”, he hugged me that day and thanked me for being his friend, he said. Our clinicals where mostly held in the reading hospital, it was a letdown for me once I realized that in order to work in the hospital a nurse must be registered. This is when my next goal began to formulate in my career checklist. I decided I needed to become a registered nurse. The reading hospital school of health sciences has a competitive curriculum and it would be an honor to be accepted into the nursing program. I believe I am a perfect fit despite some minor bumps in the road, I am determined and focused on becoming a registered nurse. I currently work the flex position at my job and have a very supportive family that are willing to help me in my endeavors. I have previous medical experience and truly am dedicated to becoming the best nurse possible. My life experiences have helped me to realize that nursing is my calling, that when given the opportunity to help and care for others I feel best about myself and I thrive. Thank you all for your time and I'm looking forward to hearing back from you.