jonesel9

Thank you to all who helped me through this paper!!! Wish me luck I am submitting it today. The word count is exactly what they are looking for! I went back through each sentence and took your advice. It made sense to me once I did. It's due tommorrow so sorry I couldn't repost the final but I feel confident that the final submission is a lot better than my originial post! With your help guys!!:)

Yes I do have a word limit which I am going back now deleting alot of sentences. Also changing things. This was just a rough draft with throwing all my ideas out there. I just needed the help like keylime provided to help steer my paper in the right direction.

I agree iheartcats is difficult with writting to a commitee because you have to stay on track! and you feel as though you want to write a whole book of ideas to them. However your essay seems very simple since you only have three questions. You have a good plan so far for your paper! I feel completely blank at times with these admissions paper. Ummm that is a tough one because I'm sure everyone will say because I can bring many outstanding skills to your nuring program or something along that????

lol. Okay. GOT IT!! Thank you soo much keylime, your comments have helped me!!!!:)

Thank you sooo much keylimesqueez for breaking these sentences down for me!!BTW I love keylime pie.lol. :) . It's different when you are reading your paper than when someone else reads it. The tips you provided helped me to read over these sentences in depth more by elaborating as well. The last statement you made about what have I done that shows you have these asssets I have a question about. If I stick to talking about two of my past achievements should I give an example of what I have done with my moral decisions, etc? Or how should I go about doing that? For example when I talk about my Phi Theata Kappa memebership I'm talking about leadership, commitments, and communication skills. However instead of talking about them your saying I should give examples of what I have accomplish in doing these things?

If I talk about two of my accomplishments and expand upon them. Is there where I would include all the things they are asking? 1. intellectual interests and meaningful educatiion or healthcare awards; -memberships, activites, and achievements -knowledge of the profession and/or experience in healthcare (voluntering, shadowing, research, etc) or do I talk about 2.communication skills, motivation, and career goals, suitability for the profession, and your personal, ethical, and moral decisions making ability? I think I'm getting confused as to which one I need to include in my paper the one above or the second sentence? I know the prompt is asking what will you as a student bring to the college community. So do I need to stick to two accomplishment than with those two talk about what I could bring to the campus including the topics they said include in the paper?Should I take out career goals, suitability for the professions, moral/ethical decisions? I thought that's what they are looking for in the paper. So should I combine all these together into one?instead of separating them?

Thank you for your help!!! Your advice was just what I needed to hear. Admissions papers can be difficult especially since I feel as though I want to include everything.lol. However a good tip you mentioned was keep it straight to the point. Another thing is that you have to stay on track it is easy to drift off. What school are you writting for? Is it asking the same kinds of questions? How are you writting your paper? Good Luck with yours too!!

Applicants to the College of Nursing are asked to provide the Faculty Admissions Committee with information that will enhance its ability to give each applicant fully informed, indiviualized, and holistic consideration. The Committee is specifically looking at: communication skills, motivation, and career goals, suitability for the profession, and your personal, ethical, and moral decisions making ability. In your essays, please include: -intellectual interests and meaningful educatiion or healthcare awards; -memberships, activites, and achievements -knowledge of the profession and/or experience in healthcare (voluntering, shadowing, research, etc) What will you as a student bring to our college community? Can someone please read my paper and give me advice/feedback? I still am not finish and still have to rearrange sentences. However this is what I came up with so far. Let me know if I have answered what they are looking for. Sorry I know it is long but I want to make sure I have included everything they are asking for. Some parts I am just speaking out loud on what I am going to type but haven't finish yet. I have been looking forward to the great opportunity to attend The University of Arizona's nursing program for a long time now because of the college mission statement that I know I will enrich. I feel I can bring a lot to the campus such as my unique talents/commitments, motivation, communication skills, outstanding moral decision making ability, leadership skills, and hobbies. Although I have always had these qualities, I was not always certain what to do with them, but I have always known that I admire and hold great respect for bringing my individual unique abilities to the community. For example, in my senior year of high school I was given the incredible opportunity, which I am so grateful for, to volunteer in the hospital as a file clerk and a front office assistant. As a front office assistant my duty was to strongly communicate efficiently to the doctors, nurses, and patients about any important information. I even won a healthcare award for the best communication staff on the hospital floor. With my exceptional communication skills I look forward to organizing Arizona's campus with a social enhancement club for students with disabilities who have never got the chance to express themselves openly. This club that I plan to start will truly make a difference in someone's life by educating, engaging, serving, and... My experience as a volunteer has truly helped to cement the notion of me becoming a nurse, and has taught me the significance of cultural competence, empathy, and communication. Best of all, through working beside my mom I have learned a lot about myself and the person I want to become. (Career goals) I have discovered that nursing is my true calling to graduate at The University of Arizona with a BSN. Once I graduate as an RN, work in the surgery room as a travel nurse in every state and overseas. I have found this career is well suited for me because I am a hard worker, ambitious person, love to interact with individuals, and proactive. (Motivation).This volunteer experience has helped me find a (suitability for the profession) where I can handle the challenge that comes my way. I find this a suitable profession because I can expand my ideas and always put my best foot forward for others who are less fortunate than I am. I really feel as though my passion and compassion for people is what I could also bring to the campus. I have found that I was faced with hard situations that required moral decisions and still had to provide the best care possible to the patients. My personal moral/ethical decision making ability traits are what make me stand out the most from the crowd. I have taken ethics class which most importantly helped me with making ethical decisions. My individual stable moral qualities such as empathy, honesty, fortitude, helpfulness, and good behavior habits (elaborate) are seen when I'm at best doing ......... With these aspects I could bring to The University of Arizona's college community... I am apart of Phi Theta Kappa membership which I am highly committed to contribute to making this world a batter place. The goal of this organization is to encourage scholastic achievements as well as personal growth and development. Being apart of Phi Theta Kappa has provided me with the tools necessary to unleash leadership skills. Every project or campus activity from HOSA feed the hungry to discovering new technology for scientist for a cure of a disease I would always be involved with helping. At The University of Arizona I know as a student I could bring resources that will enhance the future and personal success of my peers. I want to make a difference, whether it is by raising money for local charities, engaging in service activities on campus or in the community, or promoting fellowship among fellow Arizona students. I know as a student I will make an effort to not just better myself, but to better the lives of those around me, through the campus as well as the community. Through various participation in multiple activities I hope to open many doors academically by tutoring others if they having trouble in their courses,............. ( try to talk about leadership skills, and how you would be involved in campus activities, acheievements ). Last year, I was involved in a world wide convention achievement new ideas for a new recelying program that would benefit the college. ................... I would work tirelessly to earn the privilege to be at this college and I know I could bring a student filled with ideas, with the desire to let this mind expand. and ( going to talk about how my own unique sense of style can be different from the average person.) (going to include Intellectual interests). All of these qualities have shaped me into an amazing diverse individual and hope to contribute this to my peers, faculty, and to the college community.

Congrats to you :).I hope you get in.Im sure if they have 30 seats left you will fill the spot.I've heard that most people do get in if placed on the waiting list if not the next round.You could be lucky.

@Destinede what was your GPA?and did you get points for any of the stuff they listed?

@mnmegg thanks!I'm looking everywhere.lol

@Cricket404 have you looked at Bauder College?they also do Kaplan test..What is the Kaplan test?Like what sections are on there and is it harder than TEAS?

@Crickett404 omg!!!wait you had a 3.4 and bachelors!??and West ga didn't accept you?3.4 is great and second i thought they give points for degrees. smh I just don't understand their way of choosing people.

@Destinede that's what i was curious about.I wasn't.Were you?or anybody else.

I agree @ Crickett404!!I didn't know it would be this competitive either.I think the best thing to do is to apply to all schools even out of state!Also look into ADN program and bridge over for BSN. I'm doing both routes because its ridiculous to have to wait so long to get into a program again.Nobody has that much time to waste especially since a lot of programs in ga only accept one semester not spring,summer,and fall.smh.But that's my plan.I heard its musch harder in ga than out of state like VA or etc.Im looking into VA schools now.