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[whitney2012]

i am writing my essay for nursing school and just want to see what you all think so feel free to give me some tips!

[color=#333333]when someone asks me "what is a nurse", my answer is always the same. a nurse is not just someone who takes care of sick people or just wants a good salary; a nurse is someone who cares deep down. nurses deal not only with patients but those patients' families and friends. nurses are those people who often put the families at ease about their loved one who is sick; they put all their time and energy in a day towards making a difference in someone's life. nurses are inspirational people who put everyone else before themselves. there was a nurse in my life that carried more than enough inspiration for me to become a nurse.[color=#333333] when my mother began working at her current job there were many nurses but really there was one who stood out to me. she was what every nurse hoped to be someday. she was always there to help no matter when she was needed; it was sort of like she lived at her job. no one was more important than her patients. she was the true definition of a nurse.[color=#333333] then about four years ago she had been diagnosed with brain and lung cancer. just as anyone else would do she fought and she fought hard. she went through chemotherapy and radiation to try to overcome what had been given to her and she did, she had won this round with cancer. she had been able to get back to helping those that needed her the most. just when she thought her life was back to normal more bad news came to her, the cancer had come back again and was worse than last time.[color=#333333] as she had done the first time she began fighting back. she faught for a good while until she decided she just couldn't do it anymore. no one ever wants to give up but at some point you have to decide enough is enough. she began to get gradually worse and over time could no longer work so she had to quit her job. by july of 2011 she was becoming worse and was no longer able to walk. she was still able to get around but you could tell she was ready. she spent some time in and out of the hospital and was put on hospice when she returned home. [color=#333333] my family and i would spend most of our evenings over at her house with her family and friends even if we just sat around. by august she was bed ridden. i had to watch her slowly get worse and know that there was nothing i could do for her. i couldn't stand to see her that way but the hospice nurse's were amazing and kept her comfortable at all times. on august 27, 2011 i received the phone call that she had passed away. i was devastated and heartbroken but i knew she was no longer going to suffer. [color=#333333] at this point i realized that i was one hundred percent sure that i wanted to be a nurse. even though she was not here anymore i want to make her proud. i want to be the person that these people come to for help. touching the lives of patients and families and knowing that you helped them get better is more rewarding than getting a paycheck. i desire to see that glow on someone's face when i have done something good that they will remember. she was proof that even if you are just as sick of some of your patients a nurse never quits being a nurse. in time i know that i will make her proud.