Admission Essay: Need opinions, please!

Hi All,

HELP!! I'm working on my admission essay and would like at least another pair of eyes to review. There were no minimum or maximum # of words, so I thought it would be best to keep relatively short at less than 500 words.

The application for Rutgers University asks for a response to the following:
"Please explain why you want to enroll in the College of Nursing."

Let me know so I can send the essay by private message or email. Your candid feedback is very much welcomed!


Vic