What's Wrong with My Resume?

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    BRITTANY _____
    Address Here | City, IN zip| phone number ____@ivytech.edu
    OBJECTIVE
    A licensed practical nursing position that will totally utilize my skills and abilities
    SKILLS PROFILE
    Success oriented with high energy and positive attitude
    Strong sense of responsibility and motivation
    Eager and willing to learn
    Function effectively in stressful situations and emergencies
    Strong patient advocate
    EDUCATION
    Ivy Tech Community College, CITY IN
    Practical Nursing program, Graduated December 2010

    Maintained GPA of 3.6/4.0 throughout college career

    EMPLOYMENT HISTORY
    Charge Nurse-LPN, (facility name) 7/2011- current
    CITY, IN

    • Perform physical assessment of new admissions and current residents
    • Provided direct patient care, including administering medications and specialized treatments, to residents as ordered
    • Communicate and coordinate care and delivery of services with all medical disciplines


    Medical-Surgical LPN, Maxim Staffing Solutions 5/2011 current
    (CITY), IN

    • Used the nursing process to assess, plan, implement, and evaluate patient care
    • Identified and prioritized patient care requirements
    • Provided direct patient care, including medication administration and specialized treatments as ordered


    Charge Nurse-LPN, (FACILITY) Health and Living Community 1/2011 5/2011
    CITY, IN

    • Performed physical assessment of new admissions and of current residents
    • Provided direct patient care, including administering medications and specialized treatments, to residents as ordered
    • Communicated and coordinated care and delivery of services with all medical disciplines






    This is my resume. I keep getting turned down for hospital positions. I've edited out my personal information, but the gist of everything is still in there. I need to know what to do to brush this up. I'm BLS certified, I'm on the Admissions Committee at my current facility, currently returning to school for my ASN. What can I do to make my resume more attractive? I'd really like to get into a hospital before my skills go to waste.

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    this isn't much of a resume because there isn't much to tell, having only been working for a little more than a year. can you add any volunteer work or other education or skills outside of nursing to give a better imprssion of your worth to a prospective employer? as to the rest of it, well, what you've basically done is give an lpn job description, sometimes repeatedly. it's no big whoops if you give meds and do treatments, you're supposed to do that.

    certifications: bls, aha (or arc, whatever), date
    committee responsibilities: admission committee: i did this, and this, and this too. as a result, this, this, and this changed in these ways to make things better in these ways.

    add to education: abccc, asn nursing program, present gpa x.xx, date of graduation may 2013



    • used the nursing process to assess, plan, implement, and evaluate patient care
    • identified and prioritized patient care requirements

    lpns cannot assess and plan and evaluate in most jurisdictions. check the nurse practice act in your state to be sure. saying that you are might cause employers to infer that you don't know the limits of your role and could be off-putting.
    BuckyBadgerRN likes this.
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    You might want to reword your objective as it reads poorly and almost sounds 'slang' (as in like totally rad, man). Objectives should be specific like "licensed practical nurse seeking a full time direct patient care position in an inpatient hospital environment".

    Agree about the assessment comments being a red flag. Include your license and certifications. I would rework your Skills profile to be more practical oriented rather than personality traits. Skills are measurable and objective whereas personality traits are more subjective...while you may think you work great under stress your supervisor may not.

    Add information about achievements such as "appointed to facility wide admissions committee by director of nursing and staff development".

    Try rewording job descriptions (you can even utilize the company job description ofr ideas/guidance) Administered medications and treatments as ordered can be enhanced to say administered scheduled medications and treatments consistent with physician ordered plan of care and facility protocol/standards of care"

    I was always taught to put "anticipated graduation date" if the date is in the future.

    Good luck
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    Indiana's state practice acts are pretty vague. Typically what LPNs are prohibited from doing are determined by the facilities. As a nurse in my facility, I always do the initial admission assessment. I don't do the care plan in the strictest sense of the word, but that may be because I am a floor nurse. Our UM is an LPN, and I know she participates in those meetings. I do care plan for medications, PT/OT/ST orders, and treatments.

    What would you suggest I change that line to? What do I need to put under my job titles? Should I take those repetitive descriptions out?

    All my volunteer work (such as for Project Safe Place) was approximately 5 years ago. I have 2 kids and I work full time. I'm not sure what volunteer opportunities I could undertake that would be useful.

    Thank you for looking over it for me! I really appreciate it!
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    I would move your experience to the top, I'll explain why in a minute. I think the "objective" is not needed. It is pretty much assumed that if someone is reading your resume you want a job. If you must leave it- take out the word "totally", it makes you sound 14. You should also write a complete sentence that ends with a period (this matters). I think the skills section is just fluff. It's like saying in a personal ad that you like long walks on the beach and sunsets, meaningless. So by the time I got to your experience I was already annoyed at all the useless information I had to read through to get to the meat of the resume. Your work experience is the most important thing and I like the way you wrote it. I would lead with that. Then list your licenses and certifications. This shows me you actually qualify for the job. Education would be next. I don't really care where you graduated, as long as you did. Lastly list any related volunteering you have done, awards you have won, projects you have led at work and so on. Good luck.
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    BRITTANY ______
    Address | CITY, IN ZIP| Phone Number _____@ivytech.edu
    OBJECTIVE
    A licensed practical nurse seeking a full time direct patient care position in an inpatient hospital environment.
    EMPLOYMENT HISTORY
    Charge Nurse-LPN, FACILITY 7/2011- current
    CITY, IN

    • Perform physical assessment of new admissions and current residents
    • Administered medications and treatments consistent with physician ordered plan of care and facility standards of care
    • Communicate and coordinate care and delivery of services with all medical disciplines


    Medical-Surgical LPN, Maxim Staffing Solutions 5/2011 current
    CITY, IN

    • Administered medications and treatments consistent with physician ordered plan of care and facility standards of care


    Charge Nurse-LPN, FACILITY Health and Living Community 1/2011 5/2011
    CITY, IN

    • Performed physical assessment of new admissions and of current residents
    • Administered medications and treatments consistent with physician ordered plan of care and facility standards of care
    • Communicated and coordinated care and delivery of services with all medical disciplines

    LICENSURE
    Licensed Practical Nurse
    License Number: *********

    CERTIFICATIONS/ACHIEVEMENTS
    Basic Life Support- Renewed 04/2012
    Appointed to facility-wide Admissions Committee by Director of Nursing

    EDUCATION
    Ivy Tech Community College, Practical Nursing program
    Graduated December 2010, GPA 3.6/4.0

    Ivy Tech Community College, ASN program
    Anticipated Graduation: May 2013, Present GPA 3.6/4.0





    This is what I did based on everyone's suggestions. I couldn't think of anything that wasn't redundant to put in the skills profile, so I took it out completely. Anything else?
    zieglarf likes this.
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    Quote from bstewart40
    BRITTANY _____
    Address Here | City, IN zip| phone number ____@ivytech.edu
    OBJECTIVE
    A licensed practical nursing position that will totally utilize my skills and abilities
    SKILLS PROFILE
    Success oriented with high energy and positive attitude
    Strong sense of responsibility and motivation
    Eager and willing to learn
    Function effectively in stressful situations and emergencies
    Strong patient advocate
    EDUCATION
    Ivy Tech Community College, CITY IN
    Practical Nursing program, Graduated December 2010

    Maintained GPA of 3.6/4.0 throughout college career

    EMPLOYMENT HISTORY
    Charge Nurse-LPN, (facility name) 7/2011- current
    CITY, IN

    [*] Perform physical assessment of new admissions and current residents[*] Provided direct patient care, including administering medications and specialized treatments, to residents as ordered[*]Communicate and coordinate care and delivery of services with all medical disciplines


    Medical-Surgical LPN, Maxim Staffing Solutions 5/2011 — current
    (CITY), IN

    [*]Used the nursing process to assess, plan, implement, and evaluate patient care[*]Identified and prioritized patient care requirements[*]Provided direct patient care, including medication administration and specialized treatments as ordered


    Charge Nurse-LPN, (FACILITY) Health and Living Community 1/2011 — 5/2011
    CITY, IN

    [*]Performed physical assessment of new admissions and of current residents[*]Provided direct patient care, including administering medications and specialized treatments, to residents as ordered[*]Communicated and coordinated care and delivery of services with all medical disciplines




    This is my resume. I keep getting turned down for hospital positions. I've edited out my personal information, but the gist of everything is still in there. I need to know what to do to brush this up. I'm BLS certified, I'm on the Admissions Committee at my current facility, currently returning to school for my ASN. What can I do to make my resume more attractive? I'd really like to get into a hospital before my skills go to waste.
    I totally agree with the "totally" comments. Your whole objective made me say "Oh are you?" because you say you are looking for a job that will use your skills and abilities as if the other ones did not. If you must use an objective how about "Seeking full-time LPN position on ______ unit."
    Also, "success oriented" needs to be removed. No one is failure oriented so that doesn't add anything to your resume. You might not have been able to secure a position because you have been working only a year and might have no experience on particular unit you are applying. Hang in there!
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    Whoops you already made some changes. Didn't read beforehand. iPhone scrolling is too fast
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    If you are still having trouble getting that job then perhaps you should take your resume' to a college career counselor or a professional recruiter and have them see what is glaringly wrong there. A little extra effort can go a long way.
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    I think part of the problem is that you appear to have had three different jobs in a short period of time.
    Also, many hospitals do not use LPNs in the inpatient setting - I know mine (also in IN) uses very few, and they are formerly grandfathered.
    And yes, 'totally' is not professional sounding. Also, assessments are outside the scope of practice of an LPN in Indiana.

    Keep working on the ADN program, and then start looking at hospitals. I think the RN credential will be the determining factor. Good luck.
    KelRN215 and BuckyBadgerRN like this.


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