Hi all! Please critique my letter of introduction "this is not a cover page" and in this letter of introduction the company wants 6 specific questions answered.
Feel free to give your opinion although feelings are subjective and what I am really worried about and requesting is grammar help. Comma's, semicolons and run on sentences scare the heck out of me!
Dear Hiring Manager
I am interested in the nurse residency program because I know it will prepare me to be the best nurse possible for the patients and families I care for as well as the colleagues I will work beside, by the process of proper and safe transition from student to registered nurse. I see this program as a challenging experience that will require the utmost effort and attention from me, but in turn, will yield the most professional and precise outcome through rigorous training and high standards. I am interested in critical care, but not just any critical care, the best; this was proven true when three intensive care units at XXXX were awarded the beacon award. I am eager to transition from a new graduate to a contributing competent RN, and to be able to do this at one of the top magnet hospitals in the country would be an honor.
I chose nursing because I want to make a positive difference in the lives of people I meet. I had the pleasure of being introduced to the nursing field under the unfortunate circumstances of my grandmothers declining health. Her nurses not only helped ease her pain, but they helped me through a very rough time in my life that I will never forget; a feeling that I want to be able to give to other patients and families alike.
I completed 120 hours of focused patient care in the Neurology ICU at XXXXXX where I had the pleasure of taking care of an individual that was unconscious due to a traumatic brain injury. After scrupulous assessment I noticed that his right forearm showed initial signs and symptoms of an upper extremity DVT. I reported to the rounding physician the issue. After a Doppler was ordered an upper extremity DVT was diagnosed and treatment was initiated. On this same patient I also recognized a staff nurse using a pill crusher on an extended release tablet to be put through his NG tube; once questioned, the nurse was immediately thankful I saw the mistake and requested an order that could be crushed.
In a field where change and progression are essential to best practice, higher education is not an option for me, it is a necessity. I have all intentions to gain confidence, and proficient skills at the bedside to build a safe and professional nursing base and return to school to continue my education to broaden my scope and further expand my responsibility to the public. I am interested in the Certified Registered Nurse Anesthesia program. I have also researched the Nurse Practitioner degrees as well.
I am a terrific hire because I am a fresh, moldable mind that thrives in a team based work environment. I pride myself on being a meticulous individual who always puts his patients safety, health and happiness above all else. I am an enthusiastic person who will always advocate for my patient's best interest.
I am an exceptional candidate because I do not settle. There is always something higher to achieve. I openly accept hard work and challenges, knowing I will become a better nurse because of them and I would be unsatisfied with anything short of excellence. I am comfortable and competent in culturally diverse settings. I am a highly motivated individual with unsurpassed work ethic, that given the chance, would love to be part of the reason XXXX continues to acquire honors and accolades.