New Grad Needs Resume and Cover Letter Critique - page 3

Hello all! I'm a New Grad and I have yet to fufill my nursing dreams. I graduated April of this year and I've had one interview out of over 100 positions that I've applied for. I don't have a great... Read More

  1. Visit  2mint profile page
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    Female Ken, I said what I said based solely based on my impression of your original post.
    I'll share some pointers that I still retained from those 3 how-to books.

    1) HR spends roughly 10-20 sec looking at each resume. Since you're in CA, i.e. tons of other highly candidates, this should be your guiding philosophy in constructing/formatting your resume.

    2) Your resume is your self portrait, so improve the white space. Use your own daily makeup (I know nothing of this) application techniques as your guiding philosophy. Don't want to improve your white space? Please refer to #1.
    Easy improvement: under Experience, you have 2 (3 originally) bullet points vs. 4 bullet pts. Why not either keep it at two each or drop down to one each so you could further elaborate during the interview (if the interviewer should bring it up)?

    3) Resume gets the interview. Interview gets the job. Resumes rarely get the job for the 99 percent-ers.

    One more point: Why care about consensus?
    2-page resume success rate: 1 out of 100+ (allegedly).
    1-page resume success rate: 0 out of 0 (allegedly).
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  3. Visit  nurseladybug12 profile page
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    All I am going to say is, I wish I could have learned from other people's mistakes when I was younger. Now that I am at that ripe old age of 26, I tend to listen to people's advice. I got a job a week after getting my license after 1 interview. I didnt like that job after a couple months, looked around and got another job the day after I applied to another hospital and was hired on the spot. I used the same resume and cover letter. You have people who have nursing jobs giving you advice on what worked for them and you dont want it , fine , goodluck.
  4. Visit  kenderella89 profile page
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    Quote from nurseladybug12
    All I am going to say is, I wish I could have learned from other people's mistakes when I was younger. Now that I am at that ripe old age of 26, I tend to listen to people's advice. I got a job a week after getting my license after 1 interview. I didnt like that job after a couple months, looked around and got another job the day after I applied to another hospital and was hired on the spot. I used the same resume and cover letter. You have people who have nursing jobs giving you advice on what worked for them and you dont want it , fine , goodluck.
    I'm sorry if I seemed to have offended you by not saying I don't think putting clinical skills and removing my work experience is something I want to implement. As you can tell from the advice there's no way I can put everyone's suggestions in to my resume especially since some of that advice contradicts with each other. You stated that you didn't put your work expereince because it didn't seem relevant to you. For me, my work experience is relevant and I elaborated on that in the cover letter. Also, I've been told by nurse recruiters not to put skills since we all have the same nursing skills. I have been taking advice if you looked at my updated resume on the 2nd page, but like I said I can't take everyone's advice.

    Now that I'm at the young age of 23 I've learned that all advice is not always the right advice for me. Thank you for your input and I've tailored my cover letter to your suggestion as well.
  5. Visit  kenderella89 profile page
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    Quote from 2mint
    Female Ken, I said what I said based solely based on my impression of your original post.
    I'll share some pointers that I still retained from those 3 how-to books.

    1) HR spends roughly 10-20 sec looking at each resume. Since you're in CA, i.e. tons of other highly candidates, this should be your guiding philosophy in constructing/formatting your resume.

    2) Your resume is your self portrait, so improve the white space. Use your own daily makeup (I know nothing of this) application techniques as your guiding philosophy. Don't want to improve your white space? Please refer to #1.
    Easy improvement: under Experience, you have 2 (3 originally) bullet points vs. 4 bullet pts. Why not either keep it at two each or drop down to one each so you could further elaborate during the interview (if the interviewer should bring it up)?

    3) Resume gets the interview. Interview gets the job. Resumes rarely get the job for the 99 percent-ers.

    One more point: Why care about consensus?
    2-page resume success rate: 1 out of 100+ (allegedly).
    1-page resume success rate: 0 out of 0 (allegedly).
    Thanks! I made it down to one page and I condensed by 2nd job to 2 bullet points as well. I see what you mean by the white space and I'm working on my formatting.
  6. Visit  kenderella89 profile page
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    Quote from SCSTxRN
    I don't know how to say this more strongly - I strongly feel that you are making a job costing mistake by putting your certifications after your lack of experience, I seriously doubt that anyone is going to look that far. Seeing ACLS tells them that you can read a basic heart rhythm - not necessarily a guaranteed skill in a new grad. The EKG certification would get you a job in tele here, almost no questions asked... but you're hiding it behind the "I have no experience" listing.

    JMO - take it for what it's worth.
    I never noticed that before. Thanks for the tip. It makes more sense for me to showcase that first.


    Quote from GGirll22
    California isn't hiring too many New Grads try some temp companies they can help you build your resume while looking for a job of your choice.
    I heard most temp agencies won't take you if you have no experience
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  7. Visit  2mint profile page
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  8. Visit  RNfaster profile page
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    Good luck. Let us know how it goes. Everyone does have different advice.

    Considering today's short attention spans, shorter is usually better. But --remember to put in key words that a database query might use. You might call some recruiters and ask them about what to include. Finally, I would suggest tailoring each cover letter and your resume according to the particular position.

    I know someone said to drop your scholarship data. I suggest including it as it is an academic accomplishment. It shows you pursued an objective and achieved it. (You noted your academic grades weren't that hot. --And considering that --be prepared with an answer to showcase how you're addressing that deficiency.)

    In your letter or objective statement you might include something stellar about yourself along with your goal... If you got rave reviews from your clinical instructors...or whatever... e.g., "Nursing school scholarship recipient seeks entry-level nursing position on med-surg unit..."

    Keep trying... You'll get there.
  9. Visit  dah doh profile page
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    As part of my unit's interview panel, I've looked over quite a few resumes over the last few years. So here are my thoughts...

    - I like easy and simple to read (a few bullet points for main ideas) - Keep it short (you are a new grad so we know you have no job experience and all students did clinicals so keep this info brief)

    - Work experience even if not medical related can show you are responsible, can manage stress, customer service abilities, or the ability to multi-task, but be selective!

    - List things that make you stand out from the other candidates such as awards, scholarships, extracurricular projects that show you off (for example: traveled to Africa on humanitarian mission to provide health care assessments and teaching to village ______)

    - Consider taking additional classes on some topic related to the area of nursing you are interested in

    - Consider doing volunteer work at the hospital of your choice so the workers and managers get to know you

    As for your intro letter, keep it short and succinct otherwise you will lose your readers interest!

    Good Luck!
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  10. Visit  WildernessMed profile page
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    Can someone critique mine???

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    Dear Nurse Recruitment,




    Please consider my application for XXXXX, as my experience includes 225 hours of senior preceptorship hours in Kaiser Santa Clara's Level I CVICU, years of teaching experience, and strong leadership and communication skills.


    As an honors student and member of Sigma Theta Tau International (3.6 GPA), my strong academic achievements provide me great potential to transition from an advanced-beginner nurse to a competent professional nurse. My performance has been rewarded by my preceptorship placement in the Cardiac ICU, the highest acuity critical care units the nursing school offers. During this 225 hour clinical practicum, my role as a student nurse has transitioned into assuming full care for my preceptor's patient including; medication administration, communication with the Intensivist and healthcare specialists, medical record charting, IV drip therapy titration, interpreting invasive hemodynamic monitoring, and implementing care based upon clinical presentation. I also provide for XXXXX, years of leadership and teaching experience in both nursing and non-nursing subjects, from instructing sailing programs for the visually-impaired, to health education and promotion for mental health clients.


    From my teaching and leadership experience, I have developed strong therapeutic communication, focused in patient-centered care and advocacy. In Palo Alto, CA at Momentum for Mental Health, I developed and taught the Fall 2012 curriculum for their "Health and Wellness" class. At Momentum, I was both a teacher and accessible nursing-based resource for mental health clients. My goal was to educate and further develop clients' support network through a dynamic and interactive class. The outcome presented a classroom full of enthusiastic clients willing to learn, ask questions and share personal experiences.


    From my academic, clinical, teaching and leadership accomplishments, I am excited to strengthen my commitment to nursing and develop myself in the clinical setting, and learn as much as possible. As a BSN candidate from a CCNE accredited nursing program, I am preparing to take my NCLEX June 2014. I strongly believe my abilities and potential as a new graduate nurse will flourish in XXXX community.






    Sincerely,


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