I welcome your brutal suggestions on my resume/CL

  1. I graduated in June and am finally looking for a job. Please let me know what I can do in order to improve. Since I know not much time is spent reading these things, I am trying to keep it short and simple. Also, since i don't have previous medical experience I am trying to tie in how my past skills can transfer into useful nursing skills. PLEASE HELP. Thanks in advance.

    PS I apologize in advance about the formatting.

    MY NAME
    23XX sw XXth St XXXXX
    (XXX) XXX-XXXX
    XXXX@gmail.com


    Qualifications

    • Registered Nurse License- RNXXXXXXX
    • GPA 3.35

    Skills
    • Certification in Basic Life Support
    • Fluent in Spanish

    Education

    AUGUST 2015- JUNE 2017
    Associates in Applied Science in Nursing- Clark College, Vancouver, Wa

    2012-2015
    Associates of Arts- Clark College, Vancouver, Wa
    Clinical Rotations

    • 04/17/17_05/27/17- Legacy Good Samaritan Hospital- Rehabilitation (160hours)
    • 02/22/17-03/09/17- Unity Center for Behavioral Health- Pediatrics (80 hours)
    • 01/18/17-02/16/17- PeaceHealth Southwest Medical Center- Neuroscience (80 hours)


    • 09/27/16- 11/24/16- PeaceHealth Southwest Medical Center- Cardiac Unit (160 hours)
    • 04/14/16- 06/3/16- PeaceHealth Southwest Medical Center- Med-Surg Unit (120 hours)
    • 01/19/16-03/03/16- Free Clinic of Southwest Washington (100 hours)
    • 10/20/15-11/24/15- Fort Vancouver Assisted Living (80 hours)

    Experience

    MAY, 2012- PRESENT
    Waitress / Manager- Name of employer, XXXXXXXX, Wa

    • Multitasking in a fast-paced environment.
    • Prioritizing tasks.
    • Provide fast and friendly customer service.
    • Anticipate customer needs.
    • Developed skills to manage the establishment. Including but not limited to ordering products, scheduling staff, and bookkeeping.
    • Responsible for training new staff.

    MAY, 2011- MAY 2012
    Assistant Manager - Name of Employer, XXXXXXXX, Wa

    • Developed the proper skills to properly manage the establishment under the direction of owner and general manager.
    • Prioritizing tasks
    • Multitasking in a fast-paced environment while supervising multiple staff in their roles


    • Responsible for reporting and managing daily sales.
    • Monitoring film projectors, anticipating problems and fixing any issues.

    APRIL, 2008- MAY, 2011
    Floor Staff - Name of Employer, XXXXXXXX, Wa

    • Served customers purchases and provided great customer service.


    • Responsible for own cash register and its continents.

    JUNE, 2008- JANUARY 2009
    Cashier - Name of Employer, XXXXXXX, Wa

    • Assisted customers with their purchases.

      Cover letter


      My Name

      Address
      (XXX) XXX-XXXX
      XXXXXXX@gmail.com
      11/1/2017

    Hiring Manager
    Providence Health & Services
    Address of business,
    Portland, OR xxxx


    Dear Hiring Manager,

    I am writing to express my interest in the open position in the Operating Room as a Registered Nurse. I am a recent Clark College graduate and am looking to not only enhance my skills but also become a positive and productive member of your healthcare team. I am eager to help Providence Health & Services continue to provide holistic, high quality medical, and compassionate care to the residents of Portland.

    My strong work ethic, teamwork, respect, accountability and honesty have gained me managing positions in past and present jobs. I am comfortable working in a fast-paced, multitasking environment and anticipating customer needs. My skills can be transformed from tending to customer needs, to using my education and learned skills to care for patient needs. I am ready to be challenged and settle into a career that will positively impact the community. By being part of the Perioperative team, I know I will be challenged in my skills, and I am ready to meet and surpass your expectations. My fluency in Spanish can be an asset to your medical team in order to provide safe and fast medical care to Spanish speaking patients and their families.

    I welcome the opportunity to meet for an interview and answer any questions, at the time most convenient to you. Please contact me by phone or e-mail to schedule an interview and discuss the chance of becoming part of your healthcare team.

    Sincerely,

    My Name
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  2. 3 Comments

  3. by   LibertarianNurse
    As a nurse who also (in a previous life!) worked as a hiring manager for an employment service, I can give you some of my feedback. Your overall content is fairly good. I think highlighting your education in nursing first is a good move, however, I would leave out your GPA as it is nonessential information. You could mention your GPA in your cover letter, if you still wish to bring that information forward. The bullet points are great for listing your job duties for previous employers, but if there is any way to truncate the information so that there is a max of 3-4 points per job, it gives a better aesthetic. I would take out specifically:
    -Prioritizing tasks. (under both most recent jobs)
    -Provide fast and friendly customer service
    Also, there are a couple suggestions I have for rewording the bullet points, especially this one "Developed the proper skills to properly manage..." You used proper twice in this sentence which is a little awkward. Maybe something like "developed managerial skills" or "Worked with general manager to develop supervisory role" or "Developed management skills" or something like this. Another spot where the wording is awkward is "Served customers purchases and provided great customer service". The words served and service are too similar and need to be changed, and it is quite unclear what that point even means. Maybe "gave customers great service" or "Provided purchases to clients while striving for excellent customer service" or "Provided excellent customer service to clients for their purchases". Again, I am not sure what you were trying to convey there, but maybe that will help get you started.

    Make sure you spell correctly too. "Responsible for own cash register continents" needs to be changed to contents.

    As far as the cover letter, I think the opening paragraph is good. In the second paragraph, I would change "gained me managing positions" to "managerial roles" or "managerial positions". Its overall a strong resume and cover letter. I like how you drew attention to your managerial capacities as well as tying in your work experience as indicated in the "transforming skills" part. Hope this helps! Good luck!
  4. by   pnwRN88
    Thank you so much! It's so nice to have a fresh pair of eyes to look through it. I've been over it so many times that words didn't even have meaning to them anymore. I have made the changes and it looks a lot better.
    Thanks!
  5. by   WVFNP
    I would also remove the "hours" from each clinical roatation. Just my two cents. Good luck in finding a job.

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