Cover letter assistance

  1. Hello y'all!

    Just got done writing my cover letter for a Unit Secretary position at a local children's hospital.

    could you look it over and offer any suggestions if needed?

    XXX XXXXX
    3800 XXX XXXX
    XXX, TX 76244
    Email address


    December 12, 2017


    Children's Hospital
    Department-(Hematology/Oncology Unit)


    Sub: Application for Unit Secretary


    Dear Hiring Manager,

    I'm writing you to express my interest in the Unit Secretary position. I'm aware of your hospitals great reputation and believe my skills and abilities match the requirements you are looking for.

    Some of my key attributes which make me the ideal candidate are listed below:

    -Extensive experience greeting and assisting customers and meeting their individual needs
    -Adept at answering telephones in a quick and timely manner
    -Quick and efficient typing capabilities
    -Familiar with basic medical terminology
    -Well organized, efficient in operating computer systems, and ability to multitask
    -Current BLS certified

    As I'm currently a pre-nursing major taking prerequisites, I'm positive that this position will be a solid foundation in my future endeavors as a nurse.

    Thank you for taking the time for considering my application for the position. I look forward to discussing my abilities in detail.


    Sincerely,
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  2. 6 Comments

  3. by   Lrtx82
    I was thinking about adding this statement in place of the statement "As I'm currently taking my prerequisites for nursing school, I'm highly passionate about providing quality care in a patient environment".

    in place of the statement "I'm positive that this position will be a solid foundation in my future endeavors as a nurse".

    Not sure though?
  4. by   Sour Lemon
    Quote from Lrtx82
    I was thinking about adding this statement in place of the statement "As I'm currently taking my prerequisites for nursing school, I'm highly passionate about providing quality care in a patient environment".

    in place of the statement "I'm positive that this position will be a solid foundation in my future endeavors as a nurse".

    Not sure though?
    I'm not sure being a pre-nursing student has anything to do with the position. Both sentences sound awkward and "reaching", to me. I'd also be expecting lots of scheduling conflicts if you got accepted into a nursing program ...and for you to quit as soon as you graduated. I don't do the hiring, though. Anyone else have an opinion? Maybe some people would see it as a plus.
  5. by   Lrtx82
    Thank you for the response. I thought as I've never worked in a nursing/medical related field, it would be a good starting point while in school. And I have a while till I will get into a nursing school. I just started my prerequisites.
  6. by   Lrtx82
    I also wanted to add taking prerequisites courses for pre nursing, to show what I'm doing in my time. I'm not currently working, but am volunteering.

    And I've looked over my two statements, and I'm not crazy how I worded it.
  7. by   Lrtx82
    Bump. Anyone?
  8. by   Nurse Beth
    Leaving in your intention to become a nurse can be a good thing because it shows your goals and may appeal to nurse managers who like to develop their staff.

    Check your letter for grammar (ex., "hospitals" should be "hospital's" and "taking the time for considering" should be "taking time to consider") to add polish and not distractors.

    Consider adding a brief example of your skills as examples are memorable (ex., Aidet training, familiar with Studor, perfect attendance- the idea is to customize to the organization and match their needs to your skill set).

    Have you researched the organization enough that you could customize it more? What makes it a "great" organization? Be specific (ex., JC disease specific accreditation, community outreach).

    Hope this helps, it's really good as it stands but you can take it to the next level. I have so many more tips and strategies for you in my book (link below).

    Best wishes!

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