letter to potential ER employer...please read and critique! Thanks - page 3

Below is my email to a potential employer in the ER for the hospital that I work at. This my ABSOLUTE first choice and competition for the preceptorship program in this area is STIFF!!!!!!!!! It's a big hospital in the Texas Med.... Read More

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    i think it's a great idea to contact the ed manager and to be proactive, but getting an er job in the texas med center is highly competitive, so your letter needs to be strong. i would revise your letter to be more concise and professional. proper grammar, avoiding sentence fragments, not starting sentences with "but," and not selling yourself short with statements like even if it's just to remember my name are vital steps. i love writing, so i just wrote another version of your letter that you could use. it includes all of the pertinent information you listed, but i think it flows more smoothly. hope it helps! remember that written communication is an important nursing skill, so taking it seriously is very important. best of luck with getting the position!

    ms. x,

    my name is trilldayz, sn, and i was encouraged to contact you by one of the nurse managers in the emergency department at x. i will be completing my bsn from university x in may, and i am interested in pursuing a career in emergency nursing following graduation.

    there are several steps i have taken to help prepare me to be an ed nurse. i work as a nurse technician 2 at x hospital in the ed, and i participate in the harris county hospital district transition into practice (tips) program. my work experience in the ed has been positive, and i make daily efforts to soak up knowledge from the experienced staff around me and learn how to be a strong team member. i will be acls and pals certified by may, and i have studied tncc. i am comfortable with ekg interpretation, iv placement, phlebotomy, wound care, and other basic nursing skills.

    i am confident that i would be a good fit for the graduate er nurse preceptorship at x hospital, and i would welcome the opportunity to further speak with you about this position. i appreciate you taking time out of your day for me.

    thank you,

    trilldayz, sn

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    Aww! I'm sooo happy for EVERYBODY'S help! A BIG thank you to all!!!! You all rock!
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    UPDATE: Ben Taub didn't upgrade me to RN status.... I WAS HURT! But right when I was really down, I got a call from Bayshore, who saw my resume/ new cover letter and was interested in me for their Critical Care RN position! (They called me!! How cool is that?! That almost never happens.) Its a 6 month residency for both IMU and ICU. It's not ER, but I will Totally take any critical care position (heck these days, I will be happy with anything!!) Well, I went to the interview, NAILED IT, and now I was offered the position yesterday!.
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    Congratulations. ICU may even be a better start for your eventual goal. ED nurses need a lot of ICU skills, but not all the time. We tend to get rusty with ICU setups, then find ourselves needing those very skills with a patient who will be boarding with us for lack of ICU beds. You will never regret having good ICU skills, even if you do move to ED later on.
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    Quote from Trilldayz,SN
    UPDATE: Ben Taub didn't upgrade me to RN status.... I WAS HURT! But right when I was really down, I got a call from Bayshore, who saw my resume/ new cover letter and was interested in me for their Critical Care RN position! (They called me!! How cool is that?! That almost never happens.) Its a 6 month residency for both IMU and ICU. It's not ER, but I will Totally take any critical care position (heck these days, I will be happy with anything!!) Well, I went to the interview, NAILED IT, and now I was offered the position yesterday!.
    Congrats! Curious, how did another department at another hospital see your resume/cover letter? It sounds like you didn't submit it to them and they just happened upon it...
    Trilldayz,RN BSN likes this.
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    I actually didn't even know that hospital existed! Lol. But I posted a generic resume and the cover letter (made generic) on Monster.com (the job hunting website). I have a lot of critical care experience as a student and as a nurse tech. And I had recruiters call me with places to consider. And the hiring staff saw my resume and called me! It's amazing.
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    So my advice to all new grads: DEFINITELY consider posting your resume on Monster.com! I sound like a commercial LOL,
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    Quote from Trilldayz,SN
    So my advice to all new grads: DEFINITELY consider posting your resume on Monster.com! I sound like a commercial LOL,
    I went on and posted it and got stuck on the website for 3 hours after reading your post... thanks!
    Trilldayz,RN BSN likes this.
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    no prob!! PLEASE keep me posted!


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