[4x4country]

Just wanted to get some input about my cover letter. any suggestions are welcome. I probably need it. Thanks

Okay first i have personal information

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Ms. Personal Director (dont want to post name )
Facility
Address
XXXXX

Dear Personal Director:

I am writing in reference to the full time 7a-7p Medical Surgical Unit LPN, advertised online at XXXXXX. I am extremely vitally in becoming a member of your team. I have been very impressed throughout different rotation as a nursing student at your facility.

I will graduate from XXXXXX with a technical certificate in practical nursing in July. I will take my NCLEX examination in August and expect to have my license by September. I am a quick learner, enjoy learning new things on the job, do not shy away from difficult assignments, and have an affinity for relating to patients and their families.


I am confident I would make a positive addition to your nursing staff. As my resume indicates, I am had many years within the health care as a CNA at a extended care facility. Working in fast paced health care, I have learned to adapt quickly, make quick decisions, manage busy patients, do extensive patient and family teaching, work with patients who have the ability to decompensate quickly, all of which I think would also be applicable in the medical surgical setting.

I have always wanted to work in medical surgery unit. I found your hospital very educational and your nurses highly professional. It was clear to me that I was in an excellent environment in which to work and to learn.

If you hire me, I will dedicate myself to learning all I can and to working hard to maintain your unit's exceptional standards. I have already applied through XXXXXXXX’s website, but I wanted to introduce myself as a potential candidate. I will follow up with you in a few days to answer any preliminary questions you may have. I am looking forward to meeting with you soon to discuss possible employment. I will be available for an interview at your convenience and may be reach at XXXXXXXXX.
Sincerely,
XXXX

[mom2michael]

[Ms Kylee]

I wouldn't use "If you hire me". I would replace it with "In this position, I would expect to XYZ..." Always think positive!

[debccm]

Dear Personal Director:

I am writing in reference to the full time 7a-7p Medical Surgical Unit LPN, advertised online at XXXXXX. I am extremely vitally ?? in becoming a member of your team. I have been very impressed throughout my different rotations as a nursing student at your facility.

I will graduate from XXXXXX with a technical certificate in practical nursing in July. I will take my NCLEX examination in August and expect to have my license by September. I am a quick learner, enjoy learning new things on the job, do not shy away from difficult assignments, and have an affinity for relating to patients and their families.


I am confident I would make a positive addition to your nursing staff. As my resume indicates, I am (have) had many years within the health care field as a CNA at an extended care facility. Working in fast paced health care, I have learned to adapt quickly, make quick decisions, manage busy patients, do extensive patient and family teaching, work with patients who have the ability to decompensate quickly, all of which I think would also be applicable in the medical surgical setting.

I have always wanted to work in (on a) medical surgery unit. I found your hospital (to be) very educational and your nurses highly professional. It was clear to me that I was in an excellent environment in which to work and to learn.

If you hire me, I will dedicate myself to learning all I can and to working hard to maintain your unit's exceptional standards. I have already applied through XXXXXXXX’s website, but I wanted to introduce myself as a potential candidate. I will follow up with you in a few days to answer any preliminary questions you may have. I am looking forward to meeting with you soon to discuss possible employment. I will be available for an interview at your convenience and may be reach at XXXXXXXXX.

Great content. watch ur spelling and context.

[4x4country]

Thx everyone, I tried to use some suggestions . Grammer is never my thing, maybe that why i choose nursing. i can chart short hand ! LOL Plus i am finishing a research paper this weekend.

Heres the new project

I am writing in reference to the full time 7a-7p Medical Surgical Unit LPN, advertised online at XXXXXXX. I am extremely vitally in becoming a member of your team. I have been very impressed throughout my different rotations as a nursing student at your facility.

I will graduate from XXXXXXX with a technical certificate in practical nursing in July. I will take my NCLEX examination in August and expect to have my license by September. I am a quick learner, enjoy learning new things on the job, do not shy away from difficult assignments, and have an affinity for relating to patients and their families.


I am confident I would make a positive addition to your nursing staff. As my resume indicates, I have many years within the health care field as a CNA at a extended care facility. Working in fast paced health care field , I have learned to adapt quickly, make quick decisions, manage busy patients, do extensive patient and family teaching, work with patients who have the ability to decompensate quickly, all of which I think would also be applicable in the medical surgical setting.

I have always wanted to work on a medical surgery unit. I found your hospital to be very educational and your nurses highly professional. It was clear to me that I was in an excellent environment in which to work and to learn.

In this position, I will dedicate myself to learning all I can and to working hard to maintain your unit's exceptional standards. I have already applied through XXXXXXX’s website, but I wanted to introduce myself as a potential candidate. I will follow up with you in a few days to answer any preliminary questions you may have. I am looking forward to meeting with you soon to discuss possible employment. I will be available for an interview at your convenience and may be reach at XXXXXXXXXXXX.
Sincerely,
XXXXXXXX

[Spidey's mom]

"I am extremely vitally in becoming a member of your team."

This sentence still doesn't make sense.

steph

[Valerie Salva]

Originally Posted by debccm

Dear Personal Director:

I am writing in reference to the full time 7a-7p Medical Surgical Unit LPN, advertised online at XXXXXX. I am extremely vitally ?? in becoming a member of your team. I have been very impressed throughout my different rotations as a nursing student at your facility.

I will graduate from XXXXXX with a technical certificate in practical nursing in July. I will take my NCLEX examination in August and expect to have my license by September. I am a quick learner, enjoy learning new things on the job, do not shy away from difficult assignments, and have an affinity for relating to patients and their families.

As my resume indicates, I have been employed for a number of years as a CNA at an extended care facility. Working in a fast paced health care setting, I have learned to adapt quickly, make quick decisions, manage busy? patients, do extensive patient and family teaching (this sounds a bit beyond the scope of a CNA), and work with patients who have decompensated rapidly. (I would say something about teamwork/working with others here ). I feel that these skills would be valuable in a medical surgical setting, and I am confident I would be a positive addition to your nursing staff.

I have always wanted to work in (on a) medical surgical unit. I found your hospital (to be) very educational and your nurses highly professional. It was clear to me that I was in an excellent environment in which to work and to learn.

If selected for the position, I will dedicate myself to learning all I can and to working hard to maintain your unit's exceptional standards. I have already applied through XXXXXXXX’s website, but I wanted to introduce myself as a potential candidate. I will follow up with you in a few days to answer any preliminary questions you may have. I am looking forward to meeting with you soon to discuss possible employment. I will be available for an interview at your convenience and may be reached at XXXXXXXXX.

Great content. watch ur spelling and context.

Addidtional suggestions added in red.

[imafreckleface2]

Personnel

[GingerSue]

Originally Posted by debccm

Dear Personal Director:

I am writing in reference to the full time 7a-7p Medical Surgical Unit LPN, advertised online at XXXXXX. I am extremely vitally ?? (this word doesn't make sense) in becoming a member of your team. I have been very impressed throughout my different rotations as a nursing student at your facility.


I am confident I would make a positive addition to your nursing staff. As my resume indicates, I am (have) had many years within the health care field as a CNA at an extended care facility. Working in fast paced health care, I have learned to adapt quickly, make quick decisions, manage busy patients, do extensive patient and family teaching, work with patients who have the ability to decompensate quickly, all of which I think would also be applicable in the medical surgical setting.

I have always wanted to work in (on a) medical surgery unit. I found your hospital (to be) very educational and your nurses highly professional. It was clear to me that I was in an excellent environment in which to work and to learn.

If you hire me (I would omit these words), I will dedicate myself to learning all I can and to working hard to maintain your unit's exceptional standards. I have already applied through XXXXXXXX’s website, but I wanted to introduce myself as a potential candidate. I will follow up with you in a few days to answer any preliminary questions you may have. I am looking forward to meeting with you soon to discuss possible employment. I will be available for an interview at your convenience and may be reached at XXXXXXXXX.

just my comments in blue

[Drifternurse]

quote:4x4 country:"Thx everyone, I tried to use some suggestions . Grammer is never my thing, maybe that why i choose nursing. i can chart short hand ! LOL Plus i am finishing a research paper this weekend. end quote.

Unfortunately, many managers judge candidates on their grammar just as they are judged on their apparel and interview performance. Resumes, cover letters, letters of interest need to be grammatically correct. I liked your letter with the exception of "extremely vitally"(which does not make sense to me either) and the fact that almost every paragraph started with "I". With a few changes, it will shine! Good luck!