[vss04]

Being a swedish student with there are some trouble writing an abstract in a correct manner. Anyone have the time to correct following?

Abstract
Partly due to the lack of physicians (P:s) in many Primary Care-centers in Sweden a reorganization has been carried out where District Nurses (DN:s) have obtained an extended responsibility for patients with cardiovascular diseases. In a town in Central Sweden, in the beginning of 2004, a so called ”Metabolt team” was introduced in a Primary Care-center where DN:s, with diabetes and hypertension as speciality, obtained an extended responsibility for this group of patients. The purpose was i.a. to reduce the P:s workload and to increase the accessibility. The aim of the study was to explore what differences there were between P:s and DN:s documentation of lifestyle factors. Study design was a descriptive, retrospective, comparative examination of patients’ records with a quantitative nature. Randomised selection was made of thirty patients managed by a P:s and another thirty patients managed by DN:s in a Primary Care-center i Central Sweden. N**Tot(60), NDN(30), NP(30). Inclusion criteria’s: patients with any of the diagnoses ICD; I209P, I21-P or I25-P. Out of 326 documented records among the physicians were lifestyle factors documented by 38%. Among the district nurses 248 documented records, lifestyles factors were documented by 83%. This is a significant difference, (p=0,0007). The differences in education and different focus on patients’ problems could explain the results from the study. To what extent this could influence the care of these patients is a question that needs further research.
Keywords: Documentation, lifestyle factors, cardiovascular disease, secondary prevention.
vss04

[BSNtobe2009]

If this is your homework, shouldn't you be doing it?

[vss04]

Well, the job is already done, my problem is just the english language I must use in the abstract. The rest of the essay is held i swedish. My request was only about spelling, grammar and so on...
vss04

[Jarnaes]

Heia Sverige. Det stykket ser bra ut. Jeg har ikke noe problem med det. Lykke til.

[vss04]

Thank you, mange takk, tack så mycket, kiitos paljon! Engelska är lite svårt emellanåt!
vss04

[sirI]

Please remember this is an English language only forum.

Thank you.

[vss04]

Of course! I´m sorry! Got an advice from one of my teachers to reach out for help from anyone, really good in english (or american). Thought it could be a good idea to ask fellow nurses round the world. Maybe it was not such a good idea?
Anyway, got one answer in Norwegian!! Still, I think my abstract will be as I´ve made it.

[Kristyn, RN]

Hope this helps a little.


Abstract
Partly due to the lack of physicians (P:s) in many Primary Care(deleted hyphen) centers in Sweden, a reorganization has been carried out where District Nurses (DN:s) have obtained an extended responsibility for patients with cardiovascular diseases. In a town in central Sweden, in the beginning of 2004, a so called "Metabolt team” was introduced in a Primary Care(deleted hyphen) center where DN:s, with specialties in management of diabetes and hypertension, obtained an extended responsibility for this group of patients. The purpose was i.a. (I have no idea what i.a. means here. In affect? My advice would be to spell it out.) to reduce the P:s workload and to increase (deleted the) accessibility. The aim of the study was to explore what differences there were between P:s and DN:s documentation of lifestyle factors. (This is misleading, but not incorrect. Perhaps, "The aim of this study was to explore documentation differences of P:s and DN:s regarding patients' lifestyle factors.") Study design was a descriptive, retrospective, comparative examination of patients’ records with a quantitative nature. Randomised selection was made of thirty patients managed by a P:s (Spell out physician, because you have noted that P:s is plural, and you mean a single physician here.) and another thirty patients managed by DN:s in a Primary Care-(deleted hyphen)center in central Sweden. N**Tot(60), NDN(30), NP(30). Inclusion criteria(delete 's): patients with any of the diagnoses ICD; I209P, I21-P or I25-P. Out of 326 documented records among the physicians were lifestyle factors documented by 38%. (This sentence is unclear. I think what you are trying to say is something more like this: Out of 326 records in the physicians group, lifestyle factors were documented in 38%.) Among the district nurses 248 documented records, lifestyles factors were documented by 83%. (Again, sort of unclear. Perhaps: Among the district nurses 248 records, lifestyle factors were documented in 83%. This is a significant difference, (p=0.0007)(In the US, we use a decimal point instead of a comma here.). The differences in education in medical schools versus nursing schools and different focus on patients’ problems in physicians versus nurses could explain the results from the study. To what extent this could influence the care of these patients is a question that needs further research.
Keywords: Documentation, lifestyle factors, cardiovascular disease, secondary prevention.

Overall, I think your English is fabulous. I hope my comments were constructive. If you need any help with projects like this in the future feel free to PM me.

[vss04]

Thank you Kristyn81! It was really helpful. Although I read many articles in english and almost every movie on TV is english it´s quite another thing to write an abstract in a scientific manner.
Thanks again!
vss04, nurse to be in less than five weeks!